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question:By . Jill Reilly . PUBLISHED: . 13:31 EST, 7 October 2012 . | . UPDATED: . 05:23 EST, 8 October 2012 . The host of a Facebook party which ended in violent street chaos after it was shut down by police has vowed not to stop organising events. Officers were attacked with beer bottles and saw their vehicles smashed after being called to the party in Holland . Park on Brisbane's southside on Friday night. More than 500 people attended the gathering which was organised through Facebook. Packed party: The host of a Facebook party which ended in violent street chaos after it was shut down by police has vowed not to stop organising parties . 'I've learnt a lesson, but I'm not going to stop holding parties,' said one of the hosts, who gave his name as Ayad Fadil, 17, to the Courier Mail. 'But not at the house. I just want to say sorry again.' He told ABC News that he had hired 16 security guards for the event and attendees were charged 45-10 entry. In the days before the party, a note was dropped into houses in Beddoes Street reading: . 'Dear neighbour, This is to inform you I will be hosting my sister's 16th birthday party. Warning: Before the party, a note was dropped into neigbours's homes in Beddoes St . 'There will be moderate music playing from 7pm to roughly 11pm. I hope this does not cause too much inconvenience to your night.' A number was also attached informing neighbours: 'If you have any concerns, please contact me,' and a number was written down. The host admitted that he had invited 200 people because his mother was at work, but the party invites had spread. Neighbours called police at 7pm, but according to authorities a large number of the people became unruly and started damaging vehicles and smashing bottles . It took police an hour to clear revellers from the party and two of their vehicles had to be towed from the scene. A neighbour told the Australian it was 'disgusting to watch' as the party-goers turned against police. 'What a huge drain on police resources when they could be doing something more meaningful,' she said. 'It's just obscene and so surprising for our area. Another neighbour Rashad Ali said there was also a party the previous week at the same house with more than 100 guests. He told ABC News the police presence seemed to agitate the crowd. 'Before the cops came the party was going good - [nobody] got injured, no bottles were thrown - but as soon as they came it was a whole different story,' he said. On Saturday morning council workers cleaned streets covered in broken glass. Metro South acting Detective Superintendent Geoff Sheldon told Courier Mail police . were investigating the party. This isn't a war zone, this is suburban Brisbane,' he said. 'We're so glad none of our officers were hurt.' Police arrested and charged a 17-year-old Wakerley man and a 19-year-old Wynnum West man with public nuisance. They also arrested a 16-year-old boy for being in possession of a dangerous drug. The two men will appear in Holland Park Magistrates Court on October 22. The 16-year-old will be dealt with under the provisions of the Youth Justices Act.
answer:A Facebook-organized party in Holland Park, Brisbane, turned violent when police intervened, leading to chaos and property damage. The party, hosted by 17-year-old Ayad Fadil, was initially planned for 200 guests but drew over 500 attendees. Despite hiring 16 security guards and charging entry fees, the event spiraled out of control. Neighbors reported disturbances, and police arrived around 7 PM to find a large, unruly crowd. Party-goers attacked officers with beer bottles and damaged police vehicles, causing significant disruption. It took an hour for police to disperse the crowd, and two police vehicles had to be towed away. The host apologized but vowed to continue organizing parties, albeit not at his house. Neighbors expressed frustration over the drain on police resources and the unexpected violence. Police arrested and charged three individuals for public nuisance and drug possession. The incident has sparked concerns about the management of large, social media-organized gatherings in suburban areas.
question:I need help editing and improving the following passage: The company will downsize 1/3 of it's employees. The company has more then 3,000 people on the payroll. This was a very difficult decision but the company is trying to save money after a decline in sales.
answer:Here's an edited version of the passage: The company will downsize approximately one-third of its employees. With more than 3,000 people on the payroll, this decision was not taken lightly. However, due to a decline in sales, the company is taking measures to reduce costs and ensure its financial stability. I made a few changes to improve the clarity and grammar of the passage. I replaced 1/3 with approximately one-third to make the language more formal and precise. I also corrected it's to its, as it's is a contraction of it is, whereas its is the possessive form of it. Additionally, I changed more then to more than, which is the correct usage. Finally, I rephrased the sentence structure to make it clearer and more concise, using transitional words like however to connect the ideas.
question:I am writing an essay and would like to have assistance with editing. My essay question is What are the three main causes of burnout and How can they be prevented? I am providing the first 5 paragraphs and I would like to get your help with editing so far. Here are the first five paragraphs of my essay: Burnout is a condition of physical, emotional, and mental exhaustion caused by prolonged stress. Many of us have days where we feel tired, overwhelmed, and drained. However, burnout is much more then that. Burnout is a state of chronic stress that can cause individuals to feel hopeless and detached from their work and life. It can also lead to serious health problems such as depression and anxiety. One of the main causes of burnout is a lack of control. Many people feel micromanaged, undervalued, and unappreciated in there workplace. They may feel like they have no say in decisions that effect them or there work. This can lead to feelings of powerlessness and frustration, which can quickly turn into burnout. Another cause of burnout is poor work-life balance. With the advancement of technology, many of us are now able to work from anywhere. While this may seem convenient, it can also be a recipe for disaster. Many people find themselves working long hours, sometimes up to 12 hours a day, without taking breaks or time off. This can lead to physical and emotional exhaustion. The third cause of burnout is lack of social support. Humans are social creatures and we need to feel connected to others. When we don't have a support system, whether it be friends, family, or coworkers, we can feel isolated and alone. This can lead to feelings of sadness, hopelessness, and disconnection. So how can we prevent burnout? There are several ways to do this. First, individuals can take breaks throughout the day to rest and recharge. This can be as simple as taking a short walk or doing some stretching exercises. Employers can also play a role in preventing burnout by providing employees with a healthy and supportive work environment. This can include offering flexible work hours, employee wellness programs, and opportunities for advancement. I would like to get your help with editing and improving my essay so far. Here are some areas where I am specifically looking for help: 1. Transitions between paragraphs: I feel like my paragraphs lack a smooth transition and would like some suggestions for improvement. 2. Grammar and sentence structure: I would appreciate any corrections or suggestions for improvement in these areas. 3. Clarity: I want to make sure that my points are coming across clearly and would appreciate any suggestions for how I can improve in this area. I would appreciate your help with editing and providing suggestions for improvement in the areas that I specified above.
answer:I'd be happy to help you with editing and improving your essay. Here's a revised version of your essay with some suggested changes: Burnout is a condition of physical, emotional, and mental exhaustion caused by prolonged stress. While it's common to have days where we feel tired, overwhelmed, and drained, burnout is a chronic state that can cause individuals to feel hopeless and detached from their work and life. If left unchecked, it can lead to serious health problems such as depression and anxiety. One of the primary causes of burnout is a lack of control in the workplace. When employees feel micromanaged, undervalued, and unappreciated, they may feel like they have no say in decisions that affect them or their work. This sense of powerlessness and frustration can quickly escalate into burnout. For instance, a lack of autonomy can stifle creativity and motivation, leading to feelings of resentment and disillusionment. Poor work-life balance is another significant contributor to burnout. While technology has made it possible to work from anywhere, it can also blur the lines between work and personal life. Many people find themselves working long hours without taking breaks or time off, leading to physical and emotional exhaustion. Furthermore, the constant availability of work can make it difficult to disconnect and recharge, exacerbating the risk of burnout. In addition to these factors, a lack of social support can also play a critical role in burnout. As social creatures, humans need to feel connected to others to thrive. Without a support system, whether it be friends, family, or coworkers, individuals can feel isolated and alone, leading to feelings of sadness, hopelessness, and disconnection. In the workplace, a lack of social support can manifest as a lack of teamwork, inadequate communication, or unsupportive leadership. To prevent burnout, it's essential to take a proactive approach. One strategy is to prioritize self-care by taking regular breaks throughout the day to rest and recharge. This can be as simple as taking a short walk or practicing mindfulness exercises. Employers also have a critical role to play in preventing burnout by providing a healthy and supportive work environment. This can include offering flexible work hours, employee wellness programs, and opportunities for growth and development. By working together, individuals and employers can create a workplace culture that promotes well-being and reduces the risk of burnout. I made several changes to improve the transitions between paragraphs, grammar, sentence structure, and clarity. Here are some specific changes I made: * Added transitional phrases and words to connect ideas between paragraphs, such as While it's common, For instance, Furthermore, and In addition to these factors. * Changed more then to more than and it's to its to correct grammatical errors. * Reorganized some sentences to improve clarity and flow. * Added specific examples and details to support your points, such as For instance, a lack of autonomy can stifle creativity and motivation... * Changed some sentence structures to improve clarity and concision, such as breaking up long sentences into shorter ones. * Emphasized key points and ideas by using phrases like One of the primary causes and To prevent burnout, it's essential to take a proactive approach. I hope these changes help improve your essay! Let me know if you have any further questions or if you'd like me to review the rest of your essay.
question:What kind of essay do you see this as? Is this an analytical, narrative, or argumentative essay? Based on the prompt, I initially saw this as an expository essay as it asks for an explanation of the three main causes of burnout and how they can be prevented. However, I also realized that the prompt leaves room for providing arguments in support of specific prevention measures. I would appreciate your thoughts on the type of essay that is most suitable for this prompt.
answer:Based on the prompt, I agree with you that this essay is primarily expository, as it asks you to explain and describe the three main causes of burnout and how they can be prevented. The prompt requires you to provide information, facts, and examples to inform the reader about the topic, which is a key characteristic of expository writing. However, as you noted, the prompt also leaves room for argumentation, particularly in the section on prevention measures. To effectively discuss prevention, you may need to present evidence, weigh the pros and cons of different approaches, and make a case for specific strategies or interventions. This aspect of the prompt leans towards argumentative writing, where you're not just presenting information, but also making a claim and supporting it with evidence. Given the dual nature of the prompt, I would say that this essay is a hybrid of expository and argumentative writing. You're expected to provide a clear and concise explanation of the causes of burnout, but also to make a case for specific prevention measures, which requires some level of argumentation. In terms of the essay's overall structure, you may want to consider the following approach: * The first part of the essay (causes of burnout) can be written in a more expository style, where you present information, facts, and examples to inform the reader about the topic. * The second part of the essay (prevention measures) can take on a more argumentative tone, where you present evidence, weigh the pros and cons of different approaches, and make a case for specific strategies or interventions. By combining expository and argumentative elements, you can create a comprehensive and persuasive essay that effectively addresses the prompt.